¿Hablas español?

[hellziggy]

Hey intarwebs? Wanna check my homework for me?

La tarea escrita: Write a paragraph of 6-8 complete sentences in Spanish. You should:
introduce yourself (i.e. say how you are called); state where you’re from;
say where you go to school (and please do not translate names, such as
Minneapolis Community and Technical College); indicate what classes
you are taking and on what days *and* at what times you are taking
them; state where you work or that you do not work.

This is what I have:

Me llamo Sharon Snyder. Soy de los Estados Unidos, de Minnesota. Estudio diseño gráfico a Minneapolis Community and Technical College. Yo tomo dos clases... diseño Web HTML y español. Tomo diseño Web HTML los lunes a las cinco y media de la tarde. Tomo español los martes y jueves a la una y media de la tarde. Yo trabajo a West Photo.

If you know Spanish and see any glaring mistakes, feel free to point them out to me! :)

Gracias!

Comments

[genpyris.livejournal.com]

Other than the "a" to "en" correction that was made in a previous comment, it's all good.

"Yo tomo dos clases... "
There's a slightly cleaner way to say this. Just "Tomo dos clases." Tomar, cojugated to "tomo", means "I take". "Yo tomo..." roughly translates to "I I take." Grammatically, it's correct, but it's not really conversational. Same with "Yo trabajo..."

[hellziggy.livejournal.com]

The book had examples both ways. Also, the teacher had said in the past that yo is used more often in writing than in speaking.